Friday, August 12, 2016

the switch

The switch Screenshot 2016-08-04 at 12.35.39.pngRonaldo playing against ...         walt use videos to make our writing better

I've got the ball I'm going to cross it I've crossed it we have scored a goal I've tripped I have fallen onto the ball boy . We have switch bodys I have woken up I feel really weird but I'm rich . I'm real good but I feel weird ouch my head hearts to wow look at this car oops I crashed it . I hope Ronaldo does not see this because I might get told off . I can see heaps of trainers I can hear heaps of running and heaps off kicking . I'm back at home in the morning I'm in . My car ah yuck I can smell the oil in . The back and I can feel the kumfy seats I'm driving to the game. Damn I have failed now I am going to training . To practise my little tricks for the next game. My  teammates have came we . Have gone for a run I have gone home to lie on my bed .  and my bed is as comfy as the seats in the car and I go to sleep. In the morning we go to the game I see my own body and . sees his own body too I get the ball I have spined and skilled someone like a boss and I  said you just got skilled like a boss then I have done a great pass and we . Scored  now lee has the ball and he passed it and then the person  passed it I got it . Again and I passed it and we scored ronaldo has the ball now lee has it we both try to . Get the ball and we have crashed again but this time it was our legs we switched to . our own bodies we get back up and shake hands . Then we clap for our own team the end .        Screenshot 2016-08-04 at 12.34.50.png


  1. Ola I am Morgan from Grey Main. I think you described it well because I could picture it happening. It would have been confusing when they swapped bodies. Next time try not to put a full stop in the middle of a sentence.

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    2. Ola Morgan thank you for that Morgan I will try to not do that next time from Carlos

  2. Ola Carlos my name is Alex and I am from Greymouth in the South Island of New Zealand. I am from Grey Main school. I like how you have lot's of detail. Next time you could add some commas. Do you know more about this topic?


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